A long time
ago, there was a village. It has suffered as a result from wolves for a long
time. Some bold young men were trying to kill the wolf during the night. Some
had died, and some were hurt. And then they knew they could not beat wolves, so
they began to not fight back. Those villagers locked their own doors and
windows to defend themselves. Every twenty years or so, the wolf would
disappear for a while. Villagers guessed that there might be a crowd of wolves.
Every twenty years, a new wolf would appear.
There was a
small but nice family. There was a girl who was named Red, which was what her
grandmother called her. And she lived with her grandmother. Her parents passed
away when she was a little kid because of an accident. She tried to ask her
grandmother what happened, but her grandma just said there was an accident.
Since there were some wolves that might hurt Red, her grandmother traded a red
cloak from a witch for something precious. On her eighteenth birthday, her
grandmother gave this cloak to Red as a gift.
“Put your hood
on! Red!”
“All right. All
right. Don’t always yell to me. I’m not a child any more. Right? Grand?” Red
put her red cloak on. Red was fearless, maybe because she’s young. Young people
are always fearless. She liked adventures, and she always wanted to try
something she never did before, which pissed her grandma off every time.
“It’s good for
you,” said her grandmother. “It can protect you from wolves. Wolves are scared
of the color red. This place is not safe.”
“I know. I
know. I’ll be careful!” then Red opened the door.
“You’re going
out?” asked Grand. “Come back before sunset. Remember? ”
“I will!” said
Red.
It was snowing.
Red felt a little cold. She wrapped her cloak more closely around herself. “I
can’t understand how wolves live in such a cold weather.” She said to herself.
“Maybe they’re
like you.” She heard a voice from a young man.
“Who are you? ”
“That’s…not
nice. Should you at least use ‘please’? ”
“My name is
Red. ”
“All right, my
name’s Peter. ”
“What did you
mean? ”
“Par…Pardon? ”
“You said
they’re like me. ”
“I see. Cause
you are here with this bitter weather. Right? ”
“Aren’t you? ”
“All right, you
just like being defended. Right? ”
Red didn’t
answer. She turned back, and began to walk back.
“Hey! Where are
you going? ”
“I have to go
back before the sunset.”
“Such a good
girl! Not like your style. In addition, I just moved here. Nice to meet you.”
“There will be
wolves in the night, just take care. Good night.”
“Wait! ……All
right, good night.”
Red was back before
sunset. She got into the door, and began to take her cloak off.
“What are you
doing?” Grand stopped her.
“I’m taking my
clothes off. What’s wrong with that? ”
“It’s night,
put your hood on.”
“But we’re in
the house!” Red was a little bit displeased.
“Wolves can
break into our house. Don’t be careless. Winter is their favorite season.”
“But they never
did it before.” Red whispered to herself.
“Just go to
sleep.” Grand was holding a gun, and sat right behind the door.
When Red went
back to her own room, she was going to put her red hood on. Suddenly, she heard
some noises from her window, and then she put her cloak on the bed. “Knock,
Knock.”
“Who’s there? ”
“Peter,
remember? ”
Red opened the
window softly, and said to Peter. “What are you doing here? The sun is going
down.”
“Just followed
you here. I am going home. So…see you next time! ”
“Okay, see
you.” Watching Peter leave, Red closed the window softly. She didn’t want her
grandmother to know she opened it.
One night
passed. There was a person who died last night in the village.
“Who’s he?” Red
asked to her grandma.
“It seems like
a visitor or someone new here, cause everybody knows it’s extremely dangerous
to be outside of the house. So it has been a long time since anyone got hurt.”
“I wonder if
you know his name?” Red was a little bit worried.
“Maybe Matt? I
don’t remember, you know, I’m old now. So you have to learn how to protect
yourself. So wear that red cloak all the time.”
“I will. I
will. Just don’t say you’re old again. You’re not old! You can still hold a
gun. See! Those really old people cannot even walk! ”
“You’re always
sweet.”
“No, I’m
telling the truth.”
“All right.”
“I’m going
out.”
“Okay, just be
careful, even it’s day time now.”
“I know.”
Red was walking
on the snow. She had been tracking, or more accurately, following the wolf’s
footprints for a while. However, she didn’t get any valuable information from
that. It was snowing everyday. It was too hard to find some footprints.
After wandering
for a little while, Red met Peter in the woods.
“You are not
dead? ”
“You think I
should? That hurts! ”
“Sorry, I just
thought that’s you.”
“Oh…the guy who
died last night? I know how to protect myself, and actually I’m a hunter.”
“For what? ”
“…I don’t
understand your question.”
“I mean you
become a hunter for what? ”
“Just
interests. And what are you doing here? I saw that you have been here for a
whole morning. Just rounding.”
“I’m tracking
the wolf’s footprint, or specifically, following, cause I don’t know how to
track a wolf. ”
“Actually, I
do. Let me help you.”
Red led Peter
to a withered root of a tree. “Here, I followed its footprints, and then it
just disappears here.”
“Let me see.”
Peter crouched down and checked the snow around the root. And then he turned
back to the opposite direction to check the snow there.
“Wolves are
smart, you know? ”
“I don’t
understand.”
“It pretended
this is its footprint, which is not. See that way, it used its tail to swipe
the snow to hide its footprints. Normally, snow will form a smooth shape. But
this wolf used snow, which makes the surface not smooth.”
“Then let’s
go.”
With Peter’s
help, their tracking became easier. They discovered that the footprints became
smaller and smaller. And later, the wolf’s footprints disappeared, but there were
some human’s footprints.
“Some human
kept this wolf? ”
“I don’t think
so. For finding this wolf, villagers have already searched everyone’s house.”
They kept
following the footprints. And then Peter brought another assumption up. “What if
the wolf is actually a man? ”
“What do you
mean? ”
“What if it
only turns to a wolf during nights, and then turns back to a human during days,
is that more possible? ”
“Right! Right!
That’s why we cannot find its cave! ”
“So let’s just keep
tracking it. We must be able to find who it is.”
Finally, they
tracked it down to a house.
“That’s my
house!” Red was surprised.
“Okay…the
human’s footprints disappear here.”
“That’s my
room! ”
“So…do you
remember who stopped by your window? ”
“No one stopped
by my window before, except…”
“Who? ”
“You.” Red was
confused.
“Oh…I remember,
but…I don’t know. I never thought I was…”
“Yeah…me, too.
”
“What can I do?
”
“I don’t know.
It’s complicated. But before you came here, nobody got hurt, cause we all know
how to protect ourselves.”
“It’s my
fault.”
“No, don’t say
that. You didn’t realize you would become a wolf during the night, so that’s
not your fault.”
“What can we
do? ”
“Maybe tonight!
Tonight, I will tie you to the tree. Then you won’t hurt people.”
“That sounds
ok. Thank you very much.”
“No problem.
So…before sunset, meet under that tree.”
“Deal.”
Red returned to
her house. And she went to her room. She put her pillows and cloaks in her
quilt to pretend she was sleeping. Then she wrote a note and put it under the
pillow.
“Grand, I know
you will be angry. But I have to go out during the night. That wolf is a
werewolf. And it’s Peter. I will tie him to the big tree. Love you. Red.”
Leaving this
note, Red went out.
Before the sun
went down, Grand came home.
“Red? Are you
home? ”
Not hearing
Red’s answer, Grand broke into Red’s room.
“You already
sleep? Okay…I won’t bother you any more.” Grand was going to walk out of Red’s
room. Suddenly, she saw there was a red thing under the quilt. She turned back
and lifted the quilt immediately.
“Oh god!” She
realized Red was not here. She looked terrified. And then she saw the note that
Red left for her.
“No! No!” Her
pupil turned light gold. She rushed out with her gun and Red's cloak in one
second.
Grand arrived
at that big tree, eventually.
And there was a
wolf with light gold pupil and a shattered body.
That wolf heard
the sound that Grand made. It turned back, and walking slowly over here.
Grand was
crying silently. She raised her gun.
Then, shot it.
The wolf was down.
And then Grand
covered the wolf with that cloak immediately.
After a while, Red
woke up under the cloak.
“Why I’m here,
Grand?”
“Because you know
your destiny now, honey.”
“I don’t
understand.”
“You’re that
wolf.” Grand sighed.
“Oh my! Peter!”
“He’s dead. And I
shot you with an anesthetic rifle.” Grand replied. “Don’t blame yourself. Truth
always comes with hurts.” After a moment, Grand continued, “Your parents were
wolves as well, but they’re gone. I sent that cloak to you cause it can protect
you from turning to a wolf, also can protect villagers here. I’m old, so that I
cannot turn to a wolf any more. But you’re so young, and you have to let your
power out. I didn’t tell you this because I didn’t want you to be burdened.
Powers also bring you responsibilities. You have to go. Wolves are never alone.
Just go to find your partners. I can’t keep you all the time.”
“I will miss you.”
Red looked sad.
“Me, too, honey.”
In the winter, Red
was gone, with the red cloak.
The Red with The Cloak
A long time
ago, there was a village. It has suffered as a result from wolves for a long
time. Some bold young men were trying to kill the wolf during the night. Some
had died, and some were hurt. And then they knew they could not beat wolves, so
they began to not fight back. Those villagers locked their own doors and
windows to defend themselves. Every twenty years or so, the wolf would
disappear for a while. Villagers guessed that there might be a crowd of wolves.
Every twenty years, a new wolf would appear.
There was a
small but nice family. There was a girl who was named Red, which was what her
grandmother called her. And she lived with her grandmother. Her parents passed
away when she was a little kid because of an accident. She tried to ask her
grandmother what happened, but her grandma just said there was an accident.
Since there were some wolves that might hurt Red, her grandmother traded a red
cloak from a witch for something precious. On her eighteenth birthday, her
grandmother gave this cloak to Red as a gift.
“Put your hood
on! Red!”
“All right. All
right. Don’t always yell to me. I’m not a child any more. Right? Grand?” Red
put her red cloak on. Red was fearless, maybe because she’s young. Young people
are always fearless. She liked adventures, and she always wanted to try
something she never did before, which pissed her grandma off every time.
“It’s good for
you,” said her grandmother. “It can protect you from wolves. Wolves are scared
of the color red. This place is not safe.”
“I know. I
know. I’ll be careful!” then Red opened the door.
“You’re going
out?” asked Grand. “Come back before sunset. Remember? ”
“I will!” said
Red.
It was snowing.
Red felt a little cold. She wrapped her cloak more closely around herself. “I
can’t understand how wolves live in such a cold weather.” She said to herself.
“Maybe they’re
like you.” She heard a voice from a young man.
“Who are you? ”
“That’s…not
nice. Should you at least use ‘please’? ”
“My name is
Red. ”
“All right, my
name’s Peter. ”
“What did you
mean? ”
“Par…Pardon? ”
“You said
they’re like me. ”
“I see. Cause
you are here with this bitter weather. Right? ”
“Aren’t you? ”
“All right, you
just like being defended. Right? ”
Red didn’t
answer. She turned back, and began to walk back.
“Hey! Where are
you going? ”
“I have to go
back before the sunset.”
“Such a good
girl! Not like your style. In addition, I just moved here. Nice to meet you.”
“There will be
wolves in the night, just take care. Good night.”
“Wait! ……All
right, good night.”
Red was back before
sunset. She got into the door, and began to take her cloak off.
“What are you
doing?” Grand stopped her.
“I’m taking my
clothes off. What’s wrong with that? ”
“It’s night,
put your hood on.”
“But we’re in
the house!” Red was a little bit displeased.
“Wolves can
break into our house. Don’t be careless. Winter is their favorite season.”
“But they never
did it before.” Red whispered to herself.
“Just go to
sleep.” Grand was holding a gun, and sat right behind the door.
When Red went
back to her own room, she was going to put her red hood on. Suddenly, she heard
some noises from her window, and then she put her cloak on the bed. “Knock,
Knock.”
“Who’s there? ”
“Peter,
remember? ”
Red opened the
window softly, and said to Peter. “What are you doing here? The sun is going
down.”
“Just followed
you here. I am going home. So…see you next time! ”
“Okay, see
you.” Watching Peter leave, Red closed the window softly. She didn’t want her
grandmother to know she opened it.
One night
passed. There was a person who died last night in the village.
“Who’s he?” Red
asked to her grandma.
“It seems like
a visitor or someone new here, cause everybody knows it’s extremely dangerous
to be outside of the house. So it has been a long time since anyone got hurt.”
“I wonder if
you know his name?” Red was a little bit worried.
“Maybe Matt? I
don’t remember, you know, I’m old now. So you have to learn how to protect
yourself. So wear that red cloak all the time.”
“I will. I
will. Just don’t say you’re old again. You’re not old! You can still hold a
gun. See! Those really old people cannot even walk! ”
“You’re always
sweet.”
“No, I’m
telling the truth.”
“All right.”
“I’m going
out.”
“Okay, just be
careful, even it’s day time now.”
“I know.”
Red was walking
on the snow. She had been tracking, or more accurately, following the wolf’s
footprints for a while. However, she didn’t get any valuable information from
that. It was snowing everyday. It was too hard to find some footprints.
After wandering
for a little while, Red met Peter in the woods.
“You are not
dead? ”
“You think I
should? That hurts! ”
“Sorry, I just
thought that’s you.”
“Oh…the guy who
died last night? I know how to protect myself, and actually I’m a hunter.”
“For what? ”
“…I don’t
understand your question.”
“I mean you
become a hunter for what? ”
“Just
interests. And what are you doing here? I saw that you have been here for a
whole morning. Just rounding.”
“I’m tracking
the wolf’s footprint, or specifically, following, cause I don’t know how to
track a wolf. ”
“Actually, I
do. Let me help you.”
Red led Peter
to a withered root of a tree. “Here, I followed its footprints, and then it
just disappears here.”
“Let me see.”
Peter crouched down and checked the snow around the root. And then he turned
back to the opposite direction to check the snow there.
“Wolves are
smart, you know? ”
“I don’t
understand.”
“It pretended
this is its footprint, which is not. See that way, it used its tail to swipe
the snow to hide its footprints. Normally, snow will form a smooth shape. But
this wolf used snow, which makes the surface not smooth.”
“Then let’s
go.”
With Peter’s
help, their tracking became easier. They discovered that the footprints became
smaller and smaller. And later, the wolf’s footprints disappeared, but there were
some human’s footprints.
“Some human
kept this wolf? ”
“I don’t think
so. For finding this wolf, villagers have already searched everyone’s house.”
They kept
following the footprints. And then Peter brought another assumption up. “What if
the wolf is actually a man? ”
“What do you
mean? ”
“What if it
only turns to a wolf during nights, and then turns back to a human during days,
is that more possible? ”
“Right! Right!
That’s why we cannot find its cave! ”
“So let’s just keep
tracking it. We must be able to find who it is.”
Finally, they
tracked it down to a house.
“That’s my
house!” Red was surprised.
“Okay…the
human’s footprints disappear here.”
“That’s my
room! ”
“So…do you
remember who stopped by your window? ”
“No one stopped
by my window before, except…”
“Who? ”
“You.” Red was
confused.
“Oh…I remember,
but…I don’t know. I never thought I was…”
“Yeah…me, too.
”
“What can I do?
”
“I don’t know.
It’s complicated. But before you came here, nobody got hurt, cause we all know
how to protect ourselves.”
“It’s my
fault.”
“No, don’t say
that. You didn’t realize you would become a wolf during the night, so that’s
not your fault.”
“What can we
do? ”
“Maybe tonight!
Tonight, I will tie you to the tree. Then you won’t hurt people.”
“That sounds
ok. Thank you very much.”
“No problem.
So…before sunset, meet under that tree.”
“Deal.”
Red returned to
her house. And she went to her room. She put her pillows and cloaks in her
quilt to pretend she was sleeping. Then she wrote a note and put it under the
pillow.
“Grand, I know
you will be angry. But I have to go out during the night. That wolf is a
werewolf. And it’s Peter. I will tie him to the big tree. Love you. Red.”
Leaving this
note, Red went out.
Before the sun
went down, Grand came home.
“Red? Are you
home? ”
Not hearing
Red’s answer, Grand broke into Red’s room.
“You already
sleep? Okay…I won’t bother you any more.” Grand was going to walk out of Red’s
room. Suddenly, she saw there was a red thing under the quilt. She turned back
and lifted the quilt immediately.
“Oh god!” She
realized Red was not here. She looked terrified. And then she saw the note that
Red left for her.
“No! No!” Her
pupil turned light gold. She rushed out with her gun and Red's cloak in one
second.
Grand arrived
at that big tree, eventually.
And there was a
wolf with light gold pupil and a shattered body.
That wolf heard
the sound that Grand made. It turned back, and walking slowly over here.
Grand was
crying silently. She raised her gun.
Then, shot it.
The wolf was down.
And then Grand
covered the wolf with that cloak immediately.
After a while, Red
woke up under the cloak.
“Why I’m here,
Grand?”
“Because you know
your destiny now, honey.”
“I don’t
understand.”
“You’re that
wolf.” Grand sighed.
“Oh my! Peter!”
“He’s dead. And I
shot you with an anesthetic rifle.” Grand replied. “Don’t blame yourself. Truth
always comes with hurts.” After a moment, Grand continued, “Your parents were
wolves as well, but they’re gone. I sent that cloak to you cause it can protect
you from turning to a wolf, also can protect villagers here. I’m old, so that I
cannot turn to a wolf any more. But you’re so young, and you have to let your
power out. I didn’t tell you this because I didn’t want you to be burdened.
Powers also bring you responsibilities. You have to go. Wolves are never alone.
Just go to find your partners. I can’t keep you all the time.”
“I will miss you.”
Red looked sad.
“Me, too, honey.”
In the winter, Red
was gone, with the red cloak.
This is a great story. I like that you added a twist the the original story. I found similarities in the two stories. These include the similar characters as well as similar setting and times (winter). The only problem I see in your story are a lot a grammatical errors. I see the intertext and moral of the story. The lesson I got from the story is you should not trust everyone you meet because they are not always what they appear to be. Red believed that Peter was human to later find out that he is in facts the wolf that the village fears. I enjoyed reading your story!
ReplyDeleteActually, Red is that wolf.
DeleteWolf's eyes are a little yellow, or gold. Grand's eyes turns gold cause she is the wolf as well. However, she knows how to control her power.
Red is too young to control her ability with her birth. In addition, Red apparently does not know she is a werewolf. Her grand didn't tell her.
So this ending is kind like a tragedy. Cause the Grand chose to protect the villigers, so that Red is dead.
(And why the grand didn't tell Red, that's something based on Red's parents. OMG...I don't want to let it complicated.)
Besides, that red hood can avoid Red from being a wolf. (I am not going to give more hints about this...but if you have more questions, I am very happy to explain!)
TAT...anyway, I will try to make it more straight. But I like to lay hints...
Just feel free to ask me any question please. Then you will find it's really interesting!!!
TAT...if you found that I did grammatical errors, just tell me where it is!
DeleteThank you very much!!!
Okay , thanks for clearifying the story for me. Great story.
ReplyDeleteNice comments from Tajiannah, and quite a story! It takes some wonderful twists. . . I did figure out she was the wolf before the end. Nice move. Still some verb issues.
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